Read every sentence and ask, "Does this prove I’m ready for business school?" If not, cut it.

Summarize your commitment. Reiterate that you aren't just looking for a credential, but a toolkit to contribute meaningfully to the business community. Quick Tips for the Final Polish:

Online programs often prefer brevity and directness.

Explain where you are now and why the degree is the necessary "missing piece." If you have work experience, highlight it here. If you are a career changer, explain how your previous skills (like communication or organization) translate to business.